I am a Year 8 student at Tamaki Primary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 7 and my teachers are Ms Aireen and Whaea Petra.
Friday, 10 June 2011
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Dear Mum,
I am in New York City now. You should come and see all the tourists,homeless and traffic jams! It’s packed over here, like a stampede of rhinos. All the homeless begging and singing for money. There are way more people than in Tokyo. There are a mixture of languages, phones ringing, the music in cars and money jingling.
Man I hated all the car smoke and cigarettee smoke. Perfume was all over the place. My stomach roared embarrassingly. I stomped into Mac Donald’s. I brought a cheese burger and chewed hard like a tiger hunting its prey. I walked, sipping my drink. I gave my change to a man playing an acoustic guitar while I was sipping my drink, and eating my burger. I saw a limo covered by paparazzii like a hailstorm. I thought it was Jay-Z. It was the best trip ever!
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Great use of powerful describing words Jayden - I could absolutely see you eating that cheese burger like a hungry tiger!
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ReplyDeleteThank you Mrs Anderson,I worked really hard on this desription. it was our first time!.
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